Saturday, September 12, 2015

Final destination


Train was dragging at a snail’s pace. Kiara looked around, she had no co passengers. Suddenly the train stopped at Rewari.

There came Neeli, blue eyed, blonde girl, company at last Kiara thought. Soon they figured out, both were returning from Bhangarh fort, unfolding its mystery. It was pretty late, both were happy about their research, engrossed in their conversation; soon they fell asleep, ignoring how eerie the train looked.

Kiara got up early morning with a jolt. Neeli was nowhere to be seen, only deserted platform. They had still not reached Delhi.

Aaaahhh...! Neeli screamed rushing out of the bathroom.

What’s wrong? Asked Kiara. Neeli smiled wickedly.

Noticing blood oozing out of the bathroom, terrified Kiara confronted Neeli. Finally overcoming her fear she threw open the bathroom door to find bodies lying in pool of blood.

Kiara watched in horror.


It was Kiara and Neeli.

6 comments:

  1. Nice and gripping. Why don't you write a full fledged manuscript and visit Penguin publishing house. I am sure they will be interested. Great Job ! Keep it up !

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    1. Wow! Didn't expect this comment.. thanks! I'm glad you liked it.

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  2. Wow....did u just write that up yourself?...love d write up suspense n d ending....keep it up!...keep coming up with more...��������

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  3. Interesting.. The grammatical syntax could definitely get better

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    1. it was kinda 150 words challenge so i guess ..but will sure try and incorporate what you said! thank you :)

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